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Start with Physical,
And End With Emotional,
Life, Death. Pain Connects.
And End With Emotional,
Life, Death. Pain Connects.
Just don't call it Emo, please. That would just bring down the tone too far, something which I've already managed to do slightly with this commentary.
Probably the most serious Haiku I've ever written, which is why I've encouraged advanced critique, but feel free to ignore that and comment whatever you want.
Probably the most serious Haiku I've ever written, which is why I've encouraged advanced critique, but feel free to ignore that and comment whatever you want.
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Ouch. It's really true, though, isn't it? Everyone suffers pain at least once in his life. Pain is a part of it, but we all manage and live through it.
...Woah. That's deeper than I usually get. o.o Anyway, couldn't think of anything to critique, I thought it was fine.
...Woah. That's deeper than I usually get. o.o Anyway, couldn't think of anything to critique, I thought it was fine.